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Old Oct 29, 2012, 11:05 PM
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Originally Posted by iluvdukie1 View Post
Thank you so much! And this is it: Hey Mama, lately I have been noticing my moods have been a little weird lately. They seem to go up and down drastically, a lot. I have been talking to people online, and they say it is an issue, not a teen thing. It's been bothering me so I figured I should let you know rather than hiding things like I always do.
P.S. I call my mom mama, and also this is all that will fit into the text box, so it is kind of small. But I don't mind, we can talk about the rest of it in person.
1) the word "lately" is used twice
2) not "like" I do, but "as" I do, though this is a very common mistake
3) rather than "hide" - not rather than "hiding"

Otherwise, perfect! It should really get her attention.