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Old Nov 16, 2012, 11:58 AM
hamster-bamster hamster-bamster is offline
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"Bringing together Yard and Home maintenance to bring you ease of mind and a quality experience."

This phrase contains the verb "bring" twice. To improve on this, I suggest

"Bringing together Yard and Home maintenance to deliver you ease of mind and a quality experience."

I am also unsure about "ease of mind" - I think it is either "ease of use" or "peace of mind". But you are the poet here so you would know better.

The red kitten is adorable.