I agree with tinyrabbit. Also, using multiple punctuation marks (!!!!! or ?????) usually is seen as unprofessional.

Watch your capitalization and order of punctuation marks, too: "you are just human, you act like you're a God", said the mighty Dauvain God of drama and entertainment. It should be as follows: "You are just human. You act like you're a god," said the mighty Dauvain God of drama and entertainment. (If that whole term is a name, then it should be "Dauvain God of Drama and Entertainment.") Although you can do it in a limited manner, you shouldn't separate two sentences with a comma. Use a period (or exclamation or question mark, if the sentence calls for it). Notice the comma is inside the quotation marks.

I agree you should try a writer's class and buy a good reference on writing.