I am working right now and don't have the time to read your writing, but I will say this. The average writer works five years before getting a contract or finding an agent willing to pick them up. Piers Anthony, one of my favorite authors, worked over ten years making squat for magazines and writing short stories before he was recognized enough to be published, and his second book, A Spell for Chameleon, took him from his wife supporting them and him bringing in only a few dollars to him making over six figures overnight.

To a degree, your talent has nothing to do with whether you will be selected by an agent or a publisher. The more you can put your name out there will help, however. Start a blog using your book (this is recommended by almost everyone these days), pick up freelance writing jobs, anything that will get you known by people. It will greatly increase your chances. Writing, much like acting, singing and a number of other things has as much to do with being at the right place at the right time and luck as it does with talent.

If you haven't picked up The Writer's Market, it is a writer's best friend with suggestions and it's loaded with publisher and agent info.

My background: I've been writing freelance for over ten years off and on. I have written one full book (which I've been publicizing for over two years), and started about four others. You can check out my book project I'm currently turning in to a blog by going to the link after my signature. My other blog about my adventure moving across country is also there.

I'm not an expert, but if you or anyone would like to answer questions, I'll answer the best that I can. I've been doing this for a while.