I dont know if it's because you're trying to describe what happened, but the situation sounds staged or contrived, like the smiling shyly. How do you know you smiled shyly? The books on how to write advise us to show, don't tell. Don't tell us "shyly", this is first person, you can tell us what you were really feeling. You wanted her to react a certain way, and that is pretty much the last thing any t is going to do, is let themselves be manipulated by us. That goes against all their training. But it doesnt mean they don't like us. Just that they're not dating us.