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Old Feb 23, 2014, 05:56 PM
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Originally Posted by hankster View Post
I think you need a comma after moaned. And i question the use of the word bubbling - it sounds too delicate for this scenario?
I'm going through my fiction and re-writing them. I need to read more erotica to get a better understanding on how to write erotica.

That sentence has many errors in it. I'm starting with that particular piece of writing, Nightmares in Berlin, and combing through it.