As a woman myself, can I say that I did indeed find your profile to be a little bit too intellectual? I think you should go for more relatable.

I have a profile on a friend making site of sorts. I can't even tell you how many guys have written to me and told me that I have the best written profile they've seen on that site. Part of it was that I didn't go with "resume style" writing. I didn't even say anything along the lines of "I am"......it was ALL just a lot of random stuff about my life that normally would have never been brought up in conversation.....And to be honest, some of the things on that profile are things that nobody else in my life really knows about.

Try less "selling" of yourself and try more BEING yourself. Find a style that is easy to relate to. I'm not saying that you're a woman so you should sound stupid (not in the least)....its just that you don't have to go out there and prove to everyone that you're smart....it will naturally come through in everything else that you say.