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Originally Posted by Echos Myron
Quick question - from one poet to another. The penultimate line, would you go with
Evoke the strength, come spring or fall
or
Evoke the immortality
Second one says more succinctly what I'm getting at but I dunno whether it makes sense/sounds okay.
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Yes yes - I like that even more
"evoke the immortality
of what I grow with you"
This is why it takes me so long to decide a poem is finished. I keep changing things. lol