Well I would definitely get rid of the "I am looking for a LTR with someone who can care for me" part, just because it can come across as needy.

As for what else? It's hard to say. I'll try my best to explain: You give so much information that it becomes glaringly obvious how many of your interests I don't share, so it's easy to think "We'd have nothing in common" and pass you over. Whereas if you gave less information, I might be curious to get to know you further. With all this text laid out, it feels like reading an essay, which is not fun and makes me want to move on!