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Originally Posted by CantExplain
It is nice and still
when I make up the poison.
Wind starts: weeds are wild.
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Nice haiku version.
But in the original it starts with "I cant win in the poisoning game." And you think who is she poisoning? Is she a murderess? It's only at the end that you realize the weeds are the target. That part adds something to it.
Or I'm drinking tonight and it just struck me as poetic.