[Irine]

i am writing a novel about a girl who is abused by her parents and trys to kill hesrself. the point i am not sure about is how she is getting out of it.

the first scatch was like that:
it`s a trip with her class and a teahcer catches her when she is trying to jump fom a mountain. then..what hapenes afterwards i don`t know how to make in realistic.
the time i worte it she is all crying and says to the teacher "why you did it it`s better diying" and so on. and the teacher talks to her and gives her love and ettetnsion and she really makes her feel better.

now i think that it`s not realistic:
1. the girll gives up on the suicie idea too fast..although i read in James Fray book some cases he wated to commit suicede that he didn`t do it and gave up pretty fast...

2. the teacher has to take her to a psychiatrist and not just talk to her. that`s what she does in the rewritten chapter..
but the girl feels indifferent to everything (in the rewritten chapter) . she says to herslef that it is cowardy but in a way she thinks to make the other "suicied" shich is runnign aways from her realy self and trying to be like he parents want her to be.
(which won`t work for her later).

i wonder if you guys thinks it make any sense

i also have in my story a boy who was sexualy abused...and i don`t know..he reacts a certain way.
from my experience which thanks to God wasn`t too serious, i know that a victim of abuse is passive, shocked and feel weakl/scared. i need some info/critisizm about it so that my story makes sense.

i wrote it all when i was 17. then eddited it and now i am still improving it...at the age of 22.

[Direction]

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[InACorner]

im not sure exactly if i can help or not...what i am getting from you is the girl is sucidal and the teacher makes her feel better and your worried that she gives up the idea of sucide to soon?? Well...let her be comforted by the teachers remarks with a remark on her inside feeling of something unsettling that may happen...then recreate her PTSD through certain flashbacks....and at certain times....and perhaps one attempt can force her to go to see a therapist to start? Its a pretty cliche idea on my part...but its just an idea you can start with at least to ween her out of the sucidial feelings?
When you write a story..if its fiction...remember act like your not writing it...devulge yourself into understanding your characters to the point where...they are as real as can be...for the girl...what do you feel she is like...you cant really just guess what she will do...you have to know....like you know your best friends....if your best friend was an optimist....and someone said ...oh i think she talks about people behind their backs...you can with a true heart say...oh i know her well enough,, she would never do something like that....the story is sketchy and it sounds like your going alittle to fast for yourself and your characters...what is really hard for some to grasp is their time concept is as long as ours....its not shorter just because its on paper...you have to be so connected to your story that if someone dies ...you cry....you feel their pain....thats why sometimes its not always very healthy for yourself to become a writer....lol but me ...i guess im a hypocrite..i need to speed things up...ive been working on a book for a while...lol but i havent written anything down....im still getting to know the main character roflmao...let me know how it goes....

[Irine]

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why do you have trouble following?
i didn`t add the trigger icon, whatever it means. it was someone lese.

[Irine]

inacorner,
thanks for you reply.

i already finished the novel and what is MORE unrealistic to me is that the teacher doesn`t react in a way like sending her to a phsyciatrist imidiatly, because i know here where i live.
.i told some1 at school once that i did some SI ..(VERY little), and she looked scared and worreid and said that i needed a psychologust, and then i told her to keep it as a secret but she went and told and then we had a meeting with the principle and the schoold conselor and my parents had to come and it was a whole mess.

than i got to a stupid psychologist who asked me embarasing questions. heck..i could add THIS to the novel ,but

Anjela`s perents who`t send her to a T..they will just yell at her for making a whole big deal and being too much of an actress. that`s it. and after that her Dad is andgry and beats her up again....

i can`t recreae her as anything becasue she is.. well it`s just her life. Anjela is a dramatic heroin. she is ME, basically. i got out all my anger at the world in this novel.
i know that i, how ever, would never TRY to kill myself, no matter how i want to... i felt suicidal once. well more. years ago. and i though that this heavy, cold feeling can make her sort of indifferent to EVERYHTING.

i think my questions is this:

you are a teacher, saw a student who tryied to commit suicied, what do you do?