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Old Mar 16, 2008, 03:42 PM
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hey dudes,

I am trying to get accepted into a class next year but in order to be i am required to write a short essay saying why i should be. So i wrote this in 10 minutes if you are wondering why it sucks. Let me know what you think though...

Child care and development has been such a proficient and rewarding class to take. I have always known that I wanted to work with children whether through nursing, psychology, or teaching. During the summer I am actually a camp counselor with kids ages 4 – 10 at a Christian camp. By working at the camp I have learned that I have good leadership skills and that I work well with the kids. I decided to take child care because I figured that it could help me to decide if teaching was something I could really handle doing or even enjoyed doing everyday.

There were definitely days where I wondered what I had gotten myself into but the experience I received and the knowledge I got out of the class was so worth it and I really want to continue with it next year. I love working with the children and they inspire me so much. It is so amazing to think that at some point in your life you were that age and now here I am helping these kids to get the most out of their education that they can at this age. I have learned to express an even greater amount of patience by working with the preschoolers and realized that these kids when given the proper attention can do anything and will totally shock you with what they pick up from observing us, the older kids. We really are role models for them; they remember everything you say and do with them, even those little things you wouldn’t think they could. This means though that the kids need appropriate teenagers to work with them who don’t use fowl language and act in a way that shows them right from wrong. I really think I am one of those people who are responsible enough and have the right attitude to go into this class. I have a great working ethic, I maintain the honor role while taking honors classes which show that I can handle all the work thrown at me and not become overwhelmed or stressed out.

I have learned a lot from being in child care and development this year and I would really like to take what I have learned and continue to use it through out next year and most likely even after high school. Taking the child care class next year would allow for me to increase my knowledge even more and see how much time, effort, and responsibility is really needed to be put in to be a teacher. I feel as though this class, although will be a huge responsibility will really help me to get the experience I need for later in life to continue working with young children. I am willing to step up and take on more responsibility, because this is something I really enjoy and would really like to be a part of.

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Old Mar 16, 2008, 03:54 PM
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Old Mar 16, 2008, 04:35 PM
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Very good (((((((((((( Court ))))))))))))) Keeping you in my prayers for a positive response!

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Old Mar 16, 2008, 04:37 PM
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lol thanks guys but i know youre lying. it sucks.

i knew i needed to write it but i put it off until the day before its due. so i wrote it in 10 minutes and it stinks. oh well
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Old Mar 16, 2008, 04:41 PM
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What would I gain by lying to you Court? Do you think I wouldn't want you to get into that class??

I think you did a fine job with the letter.....I pride myself in my letters and I can tell you that many times the best ones come from me when I've had no time to think about what I'm writing and it all just comes out ... just the way I want it to child care essay

You done good!

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Old Mar 16, 2008, 04:48 PM
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ugh thanks i just dont think its great
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Old Mar 16, 2008, 06:04 PM
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Court, this really is well written! I know some people in university who can't write this well.

Just some technical things for spelling etc.

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This means though that the kids need appropriate teenagers to work with them who don’t use fowl language

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Should be "foul" instead of "fowl".

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I have a great working ethic, I maintain the honor role while taking honors classes which show that I can handle all the work thrown at me and not become overwhelmed or stressed out.

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Probably should be "work ethic" instead of working ethic. Instead of "show", it should be "shows".

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Taking the child care class next year would allow for me to increase my knowledge even more and see how much time, effort, and responsibility is really needed to be put in to be a teacher.

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Taking the child care class next year will allow me to increase my knowledge and show me how much time, effort, and responsibility is really needed to become a teacher.

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I feel as though this class, although will be a huge responsibility will really help me to get the experience I need for later in life to continue working with young children.

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I feel as though this class, although it will be a huge responsibility, will really help me to get the experience I need for later in life to continue working with young children.

.... I was once an English minor, never again. Honestly though, this is quite well thought out considering you only put 10 minutes worth of effort into it!

Sending good vibes, and I hope you get in!
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Old Mar 16, 2008, 06:10 PM
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It is a good essay Court Knee. I'd fix a few grammatical things and make the last paragraph flow a bit better but other than that, it's fine and you should be a shoe-in if you've had the previous class.

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I have learned a lot from being in child care and development this year and I would really like to take what I have learned and continue to use it throughout next year and most likely even after high school. Taking the child care class next year would allow me to increase my knowledge even more and see how much time, effort, and responsibility teaching really requires. I feel as if this class, though a huge responsibility, will really help me get the experience I need for later in life in order to continue working with young children. I am willing to step up and take on more responsibility because this is something I really enjoy and of which I would really like to be a part

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Old Mar 16, 2008, 06:55 PM
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I'll go with Christina's suggestions, including that this is a good essay. It comes from the heart (and mind) and that is why it is good.
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Old Mar 16, 2008, 07:16 PM
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great court!

My suggestion is in this:

During the summer I am actually a camp counselor with kids ages 4 – 10 at a Christian camp

I would drop the actually out of this sentance. I think it sounds more mature and professional if you just stick with the statement itself.

Does that make sense? Dont take that the wrong way child care essay
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Old Mar 16, 2008, 08:21 PM
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Courtney,

Just wanted to say that I really hope you get into the class. I'd never have the patience to work with small children, but it sounds like you're really good at it.

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Old Mar 16, 2008, 08:24 PM
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oh geez i kind of wish i didnt post it now, because it is a bit embaressing. I should have spent more time on it ugh
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Old Mar 17, 2008, 10:12 AM
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hey don't feel embarassed, were all here to help each other, ya did a good job, accept the suggestions there good, proud of you kiddo
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Old Mar 17, 2008, 02:14 PM
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What do you not like about your post, Court?
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